Could you please check this sentence for any error?

Religion and race are some of basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations. 

If this sentence is not correct, how to write this in a better way? 

Thanks.

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  • 1 month ago
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    Religion and race are some of basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

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    1) Change "some" to "two"

    > Religion and race are TWO of basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    2) Add "the" after "of"

    > Religion and race are two of THE basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    3) The plural of "basis" is "bases"

    https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/basis

    > Religion and race are two of the BASES for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    4) "Bases" is also the plural of "base," as well as the plural of "basis."

    That's okay in spoken English because they are pronounced differently--

    (basis) plural Base-EEZE   -vs-   (base) plural BASE-ezz

    But to avoid confusion in written English, it is better to use another word

    > Religion and race are two of the DRIVERS for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    5) Now you have to use "of" instead of "for"

    > Religion and race are two of the drivers OF discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    6) Change "discrimination" to "disparities"

    > Religion and race are two of the drivers of DISPARITIES in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    7) Change "healthcare" into two words

    > Religion and race are two of the drivers of disparities in HEALTH CARE due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    8) Change "due to" to "because of"

    > Religion and race are two of the drivers of disparities in health care BECAUSE OF the complex needs of diverse populations.

    10) Shuffle the sentence elements to improve the emphasis of the major point of the statement

    > Because of the complex needs of diverse populations, two of the drivers of disparities in health care are religion and race.

    11) Now the sentence should say "two major drivers"

    > Because of the complex needs of diverse populations, two MAJOR drivers of disparities in health care are religion and race.

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    From this ...

    > Religion and race are some of basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    ... to this:

    > Because of the complex needs of diverse populations, two major drivers of disparities in health care are religion and race.

  • Anonymous
    1 month ago

    ..some of the forms of discrimination.....

    The word 'basis' is only used as a singular word.   In theory the plural of 'basis' is 'bases', following the Greek model.   But 'bases' is the plural also of 'base', so confusion could arise.  And anyway, in that context 'basis' is not the best word to use.

  • 1 month ago

    Religion and race serve as some of the basis for discrimination in healthcare due to the complex needs of diverse populations.

    (I'm not following your idea in the sentence. What do the complex needs of diverse populations have to do with discrimination in healthcare?)

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