which sentence makes more sense?

1. It shows that many gang members want to fit in with society and be like everyone else, but they do not have the same opportunities than people in other groups.

OR

2. It shows that many gang members want to fit in with society and be like everyone else, but they do not have the same opportunities to do so.

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  • RP
    Lv 7
    3 months ago
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    The English in the first is incorrect. The second is correct and sensible.

  • Zirp
    Lv 7
    3 months ago

    They make equal sense, provided you replace the "than" in the first one with "as"

  • 3 months ago

    both of these sentences are clear. however, to give you some other suggestions: maybe instead of saying "it shows that" find some actual proof online and include that info in your text (e.i. "[some researcher] found that many gang members..."), maybe remove "and be like everyone else" (a lot of unimportant words that say what you already said "...want to fit in with society..."), change "do not" to "don't", and i'd go with your second ending "...the same opportunities to do so."

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