southpaw asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 2 months ago

what do you think of this poem?

SCORPIONS

Wander past,

Past wandering,

Past the prunes of my tarantula garden.

Boat orange and lemon splatter the legs of the beast.

Clean claws,

Injection complete.

Random attacks the sweet order of thought.

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  • FLASH
    Lv 7
    2 weeks ago

    ?  I can't say I like it. There is no sense to it .

  • 1 month ago

    This is  a poem with real poetic meat in it.

    Thank you - I think it really good.

    (`wondering or meandering and rune`.....and/ or something otter.., for ..Line 2

    as it jibes just a little into the inner rhythm

    to repeat a significant word just a line later.) ?

  • Anonymous
    1 month ago

    >_(,)_<

    Comės off as more of a Hiaku if yå åsk

    mė but this simply an opinion & mighť nôt 

    ėvėn BE based on truth so choosė your

    ôwn, yo !!

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  • 2 months ago

    This is little but a good poem, I like this poem.

    Thanks.

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  • 2 months ago

    This is an amazing poem . I really like it . I appreciate the poem on behalf of the team of institute of performing art and mind power development. 

  • 2 months ago

    I like it ....I imagine scorpions in ice:)...and it's much like the one I am working on right now.... titled- 

    5star

    Lobsters red line blood

    Blood red line lobsters

    Rolling  under glass

    Switching to thermal

    We got heat signatures

    Coming from the woodline

    I like it when they go pop

    Is it possible that he is still alive

    We are coming for you watney

    You have a secret something

    You can't tell anyone

    Because you don't trust anyone

    And now fir our feature presentation

    Agent47

  • Tina
    Lv 7
    2 months ago

    Did you really mean 'prunes'.

  • Pearl
    Lv 7
    2 months ago

    it sounds like a good poem

  • Cas
    Lv 4
    2 months ago

    interesting and scary 

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