Please help choose the best sentence.?

I make 3 sentences for the use of an indicator in station, it needs to be formal. But I'm not sure which is better or is there anything that can be revised to be simple"?

1. Passengers who use a single-journey ticket to transfer to the Circular Line via the barrier-free gate should inquire at the information counter.

2. Passengers who need to get through the barrier-free gate to the Circular Line with a single-journey ticket should inquire at the information counter.

3. Passengers who need to transfer to the Circular Line via the barrier-free gate with a single-journey ticket should inquire at the information counter.

( which is better / any recommended suggestion? )

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  • 1 month ago

    Not knowing the process this refers to, it is hard ti guess which is best.  But the rule of thumb on something like this is to order the items to eliminate people as quickly as possible.  Because people usually do not read the whole sign.

    There are three conditions listed:  1) single-ticket, 2) Circular Line, and 3) barrier-free gate.   Which of those is going to eliminate the most people first?

    If the "single ticket" is going to weed out the most people first, then use sentence 1.

    If the "barrier-free gate" is going to weed out most people, then use number 2

    If the "Circular line" is going to weed out the most people, then use number 3.

    As soon as they come a condition that does NOT apply to them, they can stop reading the sign.  So the sentence that weeds out the most people first is the best one to use.

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  • 1 month ago

    Sentence 3 is the best one, although the other two are pretty good.

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