Fluent speakers of English, could you help me with my English?
I need to translate a historical text but I'm not sure it sounds natural for English speakers as I'm not a native speaker. Do I need to make any corrections? I would appreciate any answers.
The Smiths family tried to ensure that the revenue from their taverns would not decrease as a result of the presence of the taverns owned by the Jones family.
- Anonymous10 months agoFavourite answer
The Smith family tried to ensure that the revenue from their taverns would not decrease as a result of competition from taverns owned by the Jones family.
- bluebellbkkLv 710 months ago
What is the name of the family who own the taverns? Is it 'Smith', or (less likely) 'Smiths'? Is the owner 'Mr Smith' or 'Mr Smiths'?
If, as we all expect, the answer is 'Smith', delete the 's' on the end of 'Smiths'.
The rest is fine, but I can't help wondering WHY the revenue should decrease. Are the Jones family's taverns new? If so, it might be worth just briefly indicating the fact, eg:
... 'as a result of the newly-opened taverns owned by the Jones family' ...
- reme_1Lv 710 months ago
The Smith family or the Smiths
Sounds pretty good.
- william ellisLv 710 months ago
OK but might need to describe Jones family taverns better ....."the "new" taverns would work or use other words like "beautiful, rugged, nasty old drunken.....you get the picture....
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- 10 months ago
Ummm? Me speak no iglish today.
Me from Merica my nation
- GodLv 710 months ago
The Smith family tried to ensure that the revenue from their taverns would not decrease as a result of the presence of the taverns owned by the Jones family.
Take off the s.
- Anonymous10 months ago
Smith and the rest is perfect.