How to improve this comparative sentence?

Question

I am trying to write a sentence like this below, but neither of them looks great. The second one had a number enclosed in brackets, but I don't really like that. So the question is: how to remove the brackets in the second one?

The volatility of emerging countries (17.1%) was modestly higher than that of developed countries (13.0%).The volatility of emerging countries was 17.1%, modestly higher than that of developed countries (13.0%).

Answer 1

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The volatility of emerging countries was 17.1%, modestly higher than that of developed countries at 13.0%

• Bill Jiang8 months agoReport

  This is really a great writing! Many thanks, Mark. I really found it useful.
  

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Answer 2

No thanks bro grammar

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