Are these lines grammatically correct?

I told him to release my lapel, or else I would kill him. As he didn't, I punched him in the face, and he died on the spot.

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  • Anonymous
    1 month ago
    Best answer

    grammatically correct but odd use of the words.  "I told him to release my lapel.  But he did not.   I punched him on the face and he died on the spot".  

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  • John P
    Lv 7
    1 month ago

    They are grammatically correct. A native speaker of British English would probably use: "...to let go of my lapel...." Also "..., and he died instantly." The expression "on the spot" does not feel quite right to me.

  • 1 month ago

    Yes, the grammar is perfectly correct.

    There are always other ways to say something, but that is a matter of style, not of grammar. As it stands, there are no grammatical faults in your story.

    The commas are fine too, though not strictly necessary.

  • 1 month ago

    Yes, but it sounds awkward.

    You should rearrange the first sentence.

    I told him I would kill him if he didn't release his grip on my lapel.

    When he didn't, I punched him in the face. He crumbled to the ground

    and lie motionless. Spot licked at the blood forming on his cheek, and

    looked up at me with big eyes as if to say, "What have you done?"

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  • 1 month ago

    I told him to release my lapel, or I would kill him. He did not comply with my demand, so I punched him and the face, and he died on the spot.

  • 1 month ago

    it sounds okay to me

  • 1 month ago

    There should no be a comma after lapel and after face. Try putting it into a grammar checker and seeing what it says

  • Pearl
    Lv 7
    1 month ago

    it sounds okay to me

  • 1 month ago

    You can omit the first and last commas.

  • 1 month ago

    You don't need the last comma.

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