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I will graduate from my university soon and I wanted to post a nice goodbye message. How can this be better worded? “I have officially earned my bachelor’s degree in mechanical engineering from Central University, with honors. I could not have done it without my family, so I thank them most for supporting me. I... show more I will graduate from my university soon and I wanted to post a nice goodbye message. How can this be better worded?

“I have officially earned my bachelor’s degree in mechanical engineering from Central University, with honors. I could not have done it without my family, so I thank them most for supporting me. I also thank my professors, tutors, and classmates for giving me the knowledge and wisdom I need to succeed. Special thanks to everyone at Stubbs and Frankford, till we skate again. And one last time, Shake’Em Bears!”
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