Could you please watch this video of my original song and let me know what you think of it?

I am a bit nervous about showing it to anyone here because it’s such an intensely personal song it’s like posting my diary on the internet for all to read and critique, but I genuinely would like to get some impartial feedback on whether it has any promise, so here it is: http://vimeo.com/channels/skylark I... show more I am a bit nervous about showing it to anyone here because it’s such an intensely personal song it’s like posting my diary on the internet for all to read and critique, but I genuinely would like to get some impartial feedback on whether it has any promise, so here it is:
http://vimeo.com/channels/skylark

I wrote it on a 13-hour-flight and recorded it quite literally as soon as I walked in the door to my house, so in the video I’m jet-lagged and physically and emotionally exhausted, so please don't judge my performance too harshly. I'm mainly interested in what you think of the lyrics and melody. I’d be grateful for any thoughts, constructive criticism or advice you may have. : )
Update: I'm very encouraged by most of the answers I've received, so thank you all. As always, my contacts were very generous and kind to me, and their answers each made me smile, so a special thanks and *hugs* to them. This question was asked in late August but removed just before I had the opportunity to pick... show more I'm very encouraged by most of the answers I've received, so thank you all. As always, my contacts were very generous and kind to me, and their answers each made me smile, so a special thanks and *hugs* to them.

This question was asked in late August but removed just before I had the opportunity to pick a best answer. Yesterday, nearly three months later, I received a message from Y!A Support apologizing for their error and informing me that the question had been reinstated. I hadn't realized it would become available to answer again. The link to the video has changed, so the past few answers have been commenting on a different song, but I appreciate their feedback anyway.

This is the song the question is about:
http://vimeo.com/channels/skylark#6218534

~peace : )
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